The door on oiled hinges and the food tray sliding in are so... obviously wrong for a pit in the woods, and I read past them assuming I'd been given a ghost, and then the third part arrives and quietly informs me those were the only honest details in the whole thing... He's been in the hospital the. Entire. Time..! The pit already happened. Decades ago. Excuse me while I go outside.
Oh man I worked with the elderly in a home for a little over a decade this is such an interesting take. I have often wondered what it is like inside a failing mind that lives so much in memory over the present. Now that i have gotten to the end I understand other parts of the story like the tray being pressed under his nose. This is very unsettling and creative and a really good read!!
What a delightful read - very interesting how I like each of your stories more than the last one I read - and after reading this one that doesn’t seem possible for the next one - bravo
I know someone who fell out of a tree stand while hunting. He's perfectly fine now but he had to crawl all the way to his truck after it happened.
Reading this reminded me of him, and it makes me wonder what would go through your mind if it happened to you, but there was no truck, or Pruitt to crawl back to.
I think the most chilling part was the appearance of the well dressed man who addressed the main character as “~Pa”. It sets the tone for the mystery that follows. Wonderful story, Gan!
The door on oiled hinges and the food tray sliding in are so... obviously wrong for a pit in the woods, and I read past them assuming I'd been given a ghost, and then the third part arrives and quietly informs me those were the only honest details in the whole thing... He's been in the hospital the. Entire. Time..! The pit already happened. Decades ago. Excuse me while I go outside.
You are so thoughtful, i love your comments. thank you.
Oh man I worked with the elderly in a home for a little over a decade this is such an interesting take. I have often wondered what it is like inside a failing mind that lives so much in memory over the present. Now that i have gotten to the end I understand other parts of the story like the tray being pressed under his nose. This is very unsettling and creative and a really good read!!
My father lives in such a place so i know how important your work is. Thank for reading and all you do.
He should have listened to Pruitt. Hehe. This was one cool dark journey into something beyond this realm. I enjoyed it. Great post, Gan.
Pruitt has been right often enough that people should know better by now. Thank you for making the journey
What a delightful read - very interesting how I like each of your stories more than the last one I read - and after reading this one that doesn’t seem possible for the next one - bravo
Thank you ma'am
Somewhere between physical survival and psychological disorientation. The ending feels like a threat Gan x
Between those two is where the road tends to narrow. I think you are right about the ending
Interesting blurring of time and reality. Thanks for the tantalizing read.
Time behaves differently out there. Thank you for following it as far as you did.
I like the phrase “out there.” It has a Twilight Zone resonance.
I know someone who fell out of a tree stand while hunting. He's perfectly fine now but he had to crawl all the way to his truck after it happened.
Reading this reminded me of him, and it makes me wonder what would go through your mind if it happened to you, but there was no truck, or Pruitt to crawl back to.
I am glad your friend is well now
I think the most chilling part was the appearance of the well dressed man who addressed the main character as “~Pa”. It sets the tone for the mystery that follows. Wonderful story, Gan!
He seemed to know exactly who he had come to meet. Thank you for reading.
That was a cool read
Glad you came through. Thank you for reading.