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JGWunderlich's avatar

This piece holds great pace. You sense the impending doom building. The patient accumulation of observation and the weight of small details really stay with you. Nice work, Gan.

Dwight Lee Wolter's avatar

"The woman who ran it never learned names but never forgot an order." ~ good line.

MoTy's avatar

Another smashing piece. The humorous notes poking through “floor smelled of paper, polished wood, and the institutional cleaner the county had used for as long as I could remember”. Bravo! x

Matthew E Meurer's avatar

continuation, until it suddenly stops. then continues on again. good message for a cold courthouse!

Gan's avatar

continuation whether or not justice is served

C. Lee McKenzie's avatar

There was a lot here that was so well done. These two sentences stood out as excellent:

Outside, a spring storm had lowered itself over the town with the patience of all things that have been a long time coming.

He was fluent in the language of reasonable men, and the language had always served him.

Gan's avatar

Thank you for pointing those out

Ronna Lapray's avatar

Again your multifaceted writing is spot on - not your usual crazy ending , but , one that is perfect great job

Gan's avatar

this one seemed to require a straighter ending

Ronna Lapray's avatar

You know exactly what all your stories need

Carole Roseland's avatar

Great story. I suspected the ending, as there was no other way to go, really.

Gan's avatar

we all know that bastard had it coming

Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

Wow! I was not expecting the murder at the end. Great job!

Gan's avatar

glad to suprise you

Gary L Taylor's avatar

Wonderfully done. That was a great read.

Gan's avatar

I appreciate that

Fragments and the Dark's avatar

That was an amazing read! You are a talented writer! 🥰

Gan's avatar

Thank you kindly

Marco's avatar

Powerful!!!

Gan's avatar

happy to have you!